On a warm summer evening my grandma, little brother, and I were driving home from Wal-Mart. There was a truck in front of us. That truck was carrying items you might buy to remodel a bathroom: sink, bathtub, etc. Then, there was a gust of wind, and without warning, the bathtub flew out of the truck. My grandma swerved to the right and barely dodged the flying bathtub. It landed with an explosion of splinters and fiberglass. My grandma stopped to see if they knew that their bathtub was lying in the street, but they were already picking up the bathtub’s pieces. BEWARE OF FLYING BATHTUBS … because one might fall out of the sky, or a truck.
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May 8th, 2008 at 3:20 pm
Hi Blake. My name is Mr. Schuldt; I am a principal for the Council Bluffs School District. I enjoyed reading your story about the flying tub. You added some great detail in your story. That, along with your nice organization, helped paint a picture of the event in my mind. That is a quality found in great writing. Keep on writing!
May 9th, 2008 at 5:41 am
Hi Blake,
My name is Mrs. Matuzeski. I teach reading at Roosevelt. I enjoyed the story you wrote about the flying bathtub. You did a great job with organization and with using descriptive words. As I was reading, I could imagine myself in the car with your grandma and that bath tub coming out of nowhere. Words like swerved and dodged and splinters helped me as a reader visualize what happened in your story. Good writers choose words carefully and with the purpose of helping the reader feel like they are a part of what is happening in a story. You did just that, great writing work!
Mrs. Matuszeski